1. Yes, you do - and you said you'd take suggestions.
2. No, you're not - at least you haven't proved it with this one.
3. No. it doesn't.
4. No, they don't (work on the meter).
5. I would allow it if it was your own tune.
6. Not impressed.
7. Please post some real poetry.
8. I don't need someone else to tell me what is poetry.
9. Keep trying.
10. Study someone like Phil Oakes who really knew how to write an anti-war song. It needs to have anger behind it.