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Lyr Add: Neda Agha Soltan: A Tribute (Neil Devore) |
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Subject: RE: add: Neda Agha Soltan: A Tribute From: GUEST,Neil D Date: 08 Jul 09 - 03:43 PM Thanks and welcome to Mudcat. |
Subject: RE: add: Neda Agha Soltan: A Tribute From: GUEST,Earthweep Date: 08 Jul 09 - 07:47 AM I haven't been to this forum before, but found it by Googling for Neda's name. I liked your poem very much Neil. And I'd like to add just a small contribution of my own, an anagram: Miss Neda Agha Soltan = A dim ass shot an angel. Jud |
Subject: RE: Neda Agha Soltan From: Neil D Date: 25 Jun 09 - 08:46 PM Thanks everyone for the encouragement and kind words. |
Subject: RE: Neda Agha Soltan From: Peace Date: 24 Jun 09 - 09:33 PM Should be noted that that poem WAS written By Neil Devore. T'would be great if a clone could add his name to it at the bottom. Good one, Neil. |
Subject: RE: Neda Agha Soltan From: Neil D Date: 24 Jun 09 - 09:33 PM Basiji bastards! |
Subject: RE: Neda Agha Soltan From: bobad Date: 24 Jun 09 - 09:18 PM Neda Soltan's family 'forced out of home' by Iranian authorities Parents of young woman shot dead near protests are banned from mourning and funeral is cancelled, neighbours say http://www.guardian.co.uk/world/2009/jun/24/neda-soltan-iran-family-forced-out |
Subject: RE: Neda Agha Soltan From: Peace Date: 24 Jun 09 - 08:47 PM Neda Agha Soltan, RIP. |
Subject: RE: Neda Agha Soltan From: Donuel Date: 23 Jun 09 - 11:09 PM Good for you Neil If I may humbly ask you to rework these lines which seem too weak. Its all good but could use a stronger brew. "When naked power asks its toll She wished freedom for each and all You can't tell me that is wrong No more to laugh, no more to love No more to make her song" ...so that it is more explicit regarding the authoritarian religious injustice of her murder. Even a Clint Eastwood tack would be naturally be less sappy than "no more to laugh..." such as, they took everything she had and everything she could have had etc, but you get the idea. The chant at night from roof tops "alabara" (sp) might also be a good addition. As with gem stones that last, the last several polishings are the most difficult and time consuming. best wishes, Don |
Subject: RE: Neda Agha Soltan From: Beer Date: 23 Jun 09 - 10:41 PM Neil, I have watched like many others and you have helped say things that I have not the talent for. Good for you. and thanks. Adrien |
Subject: Lyr Add: NEDA AGHA SOLTAN (Neil Devore) From: Neil D Date: 23 Jun 09 - 10:18 PM NEDA AGHA SOLTAN A special light behind her smile There was music in her soul No one protects the innocents When naked power asks its toll She wished freedom for one and all You can't tell me that is wrong No more to laugh, no more to love No more to make her song The world has watched in shock and horror As her heart pulsed its last beat We've now seen truth as beauty Bleed out on a Tehran street So young and smart and so brave Student of Philosophy Murdered in such brutal style By the thugs, the Basiji Never forget her, pray her name Neda Agha Soltan Let her last breath fan freedom's flame Sweet Angel of Iran Millions in the street all week Asking rulers not to lie Khameini said I've seen enough Let this movement die They'd just stepped out of a heated car Not driving through the swarms When crack! a cowards bullet flew And she died in her teachers arms He cried Neda be not afraid They tried to staunch the blood But it came pouring from her mouth Life gone in crimson flood She never thought to die that day Not seeking martyrdom She didn't even have a side Only hope for everyone Never forget her, pray her name Neda Agha Soltan Let her last breath fan freedom's flame Sweet Angel of Iran The tyrrants say don't mourn Neda If you do we'll come for you She was just a terrorist Seeking freedom, you're one too But they will mourn her anyway In the street if not the mosque As long as people want a better world We'll cry our golden one's been lost A special light behind her smile There was music in her soul No one protects the innocents When naked power asks its toll She wished freedom for each and all You can't tell me that is wrong No more to laugh, no more to love No more to make her song Never forget her, pray her name Neda Agha Soltan Let her last breath fan freedom's flame Sweet Angel of Iran By Neil Devore |
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