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Subject: First attempt at a complete song From: Simon G Date: 17 Mar 10 - 03:35 PM I have no songwriting ability, at least I haven't developed any yet. Comment and criticism of my first attempt to complete a song below would be welcome. The song celebrates the stories about Lawrencetown's little ice rink. If you want to follow the advice of the chorus follow the stories link or read this thread. Don't hold back now on the criticism, thanks Simon Lawrencetown Rink (tune - Sloop John B ) The year was, seventy two Hockey rink, brand new Lawrencetown kids could skate inside The rink it was small On the ice some would sprawl Heart of the valley, this little rink will be Chorus Hockeyville, in the last twelve Lawrencetown, a wildcard A town so small, the underdog of them all Vote the web zone Vote on the phone That's all the rink needs now, then it will win Started to play a squirt 'til twenty-four wore the shirt A coach, a dad and now a grandpa Lawrencetown was the place The puck he did race Heart of the valley, this little rink can be Chorus Girls of Lawrencetown Hockey or they would frown No others to play, they played the peewee Bridgetown joined in The girls learn't to win Heart of the valley, this little rink must be Chorus People with a tale to tell In Lawrencetown they dwell Hockey, skates, friends and good times No arena staff here Just a neighbour to cheer Heart of Canada, this little rink gonna be Heart of Canada, this little rink gonna be Heart of Canada, this little rink gonna be |
Subject: RE: First attempt at a complete song From: GUEST,suzi..... Date: 17 Mar 10 - 05:43 PM Hey thats cool man...congrats on ya first attempt. Im sure thre ll be many more. |
Subject: RE: First attempt at a complete song From: Waddon Pete Date: 17 Mar 10 - 06:03 PM I like it! |
Subject: RE: First attempt at a complete song From: olddude Date: 17 Mar 10 - 06:18 PM Heck I like it to, get some music get er recorded, I would see if you can come up with your own melody ... I bet you can ... for me anyway the lyrics are always the hardest part and you got em down already ... cool |
Subject: RE: First attempt at a complete song From: Sandy Mc Lean Date: 17 Mar 10 - 06:42 PM The best of luck from Cape Breton to Lawrencetown in the contest since Mabou didn't make the cut! |
Subject: RE: First attempt at a complete song From: Simon G Date: 17 Mar 10 - 09:12 PM Thanks for your comments. I sung it tonight and it seemed to work :) |
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