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Rewrite of Jean and Dinah

MorwenEdhelwen1 03 Sep 12 - 09:42 PM
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Subject: Rewrite of Jean and Dinah
From: MorwenEdhelwen1
Date: 03 Sep 12 - 09:42 PM

I did this rewrite after contemplating the Calypsos about the Cuban Revolution thread. This song can be so easily adapted to fit what happened three years after it was written. it's meant to be from the perspective of a West Indian man who travelled to Cuba for work.

So here's

Jean and Dinah in Cuba
Rewritten by Anne Ching, inspired by the Mighty Sparrow
To a variant of the melody for "Jean and Dinah."

Well the girls in town, they all know,
There's no more dollars from the gringos,
They've defeated the enemy,
And finally Cuba is free
   
Now you see them girls park up in town,
In for a peso or in for a pound
Believe me, no more competition for so,
And everything's great for the Cubano.

So when you bounce up

Jean and Dinah, Rosita and Clementina,
Round the corner posin,
Bet your life is somethin they sellin,
And if you catch 'em broken,
You can get 'em all for nothin,
Don't make no row,
Yankees gone and Castro take over now.

In Havana you hear them yell,
No more Yankees to buy what they sell,
One thing that's plain to see,
The prices are enough for you and me

Everything back in our control,
So I seeking revenge with my heart and soul,
When I spread the news in and around,
The Trinis will come back to town.

Just to meet with

Jean and Dinah, Rosita and Clementina,
Round the corner posin'
Bet your life is somethin' they sellin,
And if you catch 'em broken,
You can get em all for nothin,
Don't make no row,
Yankees gone and Castro take over now.

When the Yankee was vote-rigging,
You can see how I was suffering,
Rosita say in front of me,
She prefer the Yankee,

No, no, no, they will start to fret,
Money or not a poor West Indian can't get,
With the Yankees they've got it cool,
But other men too hard to fool.

So when you bounce up with

(Chorus)

It's "Cuba libre" once more,
They're going to rule the Cuban shore,
No more Yankees to spoil the fete,
Juanita have to take what she get,
All of them who walk bout in style,
Takin' Yankee dollars with a smile,
No more hotel to rest your head,
By the sweat of they brow thou shalt eat bread.


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Subject: RE: Rewrite of Jean and Dinah
From: MorwenEdhelwen1
Date: 03 Sep 12 - 09:44 PM

*That should be "Everything in Cuban control"*


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Subject: RE: Rewrite of Jean and Dinah
From: MorwenEdhelwen1
Date: 03 Sep 12 - 09:49 PM

And *"thy"*.


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Subject: RE: Rewrite of Jean and Dinah
From: MorwenEdhelwen1
Date: 03 Sep 12 - 10:17 PM

Actually changed the last lines to:
"No more resting in hotel bed,
By working in fields you shall eat bread."


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Subject: RE: Rewrite of Jean and Dinah
From: MorwenEdhelwen1
Date: 03 Sep 12 - 11:14 PM

What does everyone think of the above rewrite/transposition of the song to a different location?


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Subject: RE: Rewrite of Jean and Dinah
From: GUEST,.gargoyle
Date: 03 Sep 12 - 11:34 PM

SUX

Sincerly,
Gargoyle

Someone of your genius ... belongs in a space unto themself....you resume your studies?


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Subject: RE: Rewrite of Jean and Dinah
From: MorwenEdhelwen1
Date: 03 Sep 12 - 11:49 PM

Please tell me why you always post in these similar threads.


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Subject: RE: Rewrite of Jean and Dinah
From: MorwenEdhelwen1
Date: 04 Sep 12 - 12:55 AM

*Note: This is my first attempt at writing new verses. (Apologies to Sparrow).


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Subject: RE: Rewrite of Jean and Dinah
From: MorwenEdhelwen1
Date: 04 Sep 12 - 03:48 AM

Anyone? Maybe I'm not such a good writer after all...


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Subject: RE: Rewrite of Jean and Dinah
From: MorwenEdhelwen1
Date: 04 Sep 12 - 07:49 AM

Refresh.


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Subject: RE: Rewrite of Jean and Dinah
From: maeve
Date: 04 Sep 12 - 08:42 AM

Hi, MorwenEdhelwen1- You might remember that 'Catters have lives outside of Mudcat. Your writing has possibilities and can continue to improve with life experience and practice. Chances are you will get some feedback beyond Gargoyle's obligatory slam. Patience, please...sometimes threads take a while to simmer on a back burner before the flavors emerge.

In the meantime...write, write, write, and write some more. Writing is work that depends upon your efforts, not ours!

Hang in there.


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Subject: RE: Rewrite of Jean and Dinah
From: MorwenEdhelwen1
Date: 04 Sep 12 - 08:46 AM

Thanks, Maeve.


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Subject: RE: Rewrite of Jean and Dinah
From: James Fryer
Date: 06 Sep 12 - 02:09 PM

I think it's a good first effort. Your first verse is a bit weak. Look at Sparrow's:

Well the girls in town feeling bad
No more Yankees in Trinidad
They're gonna close down the base for good
Them girls have to make out how they could

He gets the situation established and located in the first couplet, all his rhymes are hard consonants, and it ends with a punchline (that also leads nicely into the next stanza). Yours is less focussed (and I am not sure the last line scans).

I like the verse about vote-rigging.

According to Sparrow, the original lyrics for the song were:

Jean and Dinah, Rosita and Clementina
Came to me one morning
After they completed their shopping
Well they told me honey
We never seen more luxury
More than when we stopped
And went in to Salvatore to shop.

Another approach is to pick some interesting local event or character to write a calypso about.


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