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G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'

02 Jan 12 - 10:39 AM (#3283411)
Subject: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: George Papavgeris

The last of the 2011 crop - for all the women in our lives.

When She Is Smiling


02 Jan 12 - 10:55 AM (#3283422)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: Jeri

Beautiful, George! How lucky your wife is to have a husband who write such love songs.


02 Jan 12 - 01:31 PM (#3283531)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: katlaughing

I agree, Jeri! You've come out with so many memorable, meaningful songs this past year (and before, of course!) Thanks for sharing.

kat


02 Jan 12 - 01:55 PM (#3283542)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: Lonesome EJ

Thanks, George, for the glow your song left behind.


02 Jan 12 - 02:01 PM (#3283545)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: GUEST,grumpy

Ugh, sorry - very cloying, especially rhyming 'rocks' with 'walks'. I need to get a scrape.


02 Jan 12 - 02:14 PM (#3283557)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: George Papavgeris

No problem grumpy, no need to apologise or for anonymity either, all honest views are valid and equally welcome. Some people like sentimental/cloying, others not. As for the rhyme "rocks"/"walks", it's called a "sprung" rhyme - matching final consonents, such as "cough"/"lough".

I like honey, me... :-)


02 Jan 12 - 02:22 PM (#3283562)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: George Papavgeris

Oops, "consonAnts"...


02 Jan 12 - 02:37 PM (#3283576)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: GUEST,grumpy

'Cough' and 'lough' only share final consonants in writing, not in pronunciation.


02 Jan 12 - 02:56 PM (#3283590)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: George Papavgeris

Not to quibble, "bent" and "ant" then...
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rhyme#Types_of_rhyme.

The alternative is "oblique rhyme". In any case, they are both valid. I like Golden Syrup too :-)


02 Jan 12 - 03:09 PM (#3283604)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: Jeri

Don't want to microscopically analyze the rhyming. I think one has to be trying hard to find something they don't like to have a problem with "walks" and "rocks". If I don't notice it accidentally, it doesn't matter to me.

Then what can, do. Them what can't, bitch. (The "teaching" is for those who can do and can explain it so others can too.)


02 Jan 12 - 03:54 PM (#3283631)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: Acorn4

Joey Dee and the Starlighters managed to rhyme "la la" with "twilight."

"Sitting in the larm lah,
Waiting for my ya ya - agh agh"

You can usually get away with approximate rhymes.

Good song, George, and I'm sure appreciated by the good lady.


02 Jan 12 - 04:29 PM (#3283647)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: gnu

"Beautiful" just about says it all. Grumpy... if I wasn't such a demure and polite young thing, I'd tell ya ta

Well, there are SO many choices. You fit in the blank.


02 Jan 12 - 04:55 PM (#3283657)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: Acorn4

...oh, by the way, was that sylph like silhouette really you?


02 Jan 12 - 05:27 PM (#3283670)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: George Papavgeris

I am sorry to say that it was... Really sorry...


02 Jan 12 - 05:45 PM (#3283679)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: YorkshireYankee

Heartwarming! Vanessa is a lucky lady -- and you already know what a lucky man you are -- which is, of course, why you wrote the song...


02 Jan 12 - 08:15 PM (#3283763)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: Sandra in Sydney

George, somewhere around 100 years ago an advertiser considered an 11 stone (154lb, 70kg) woman a sylph! He was advertising some sort of weight reduction product in a magazine & promised a return to this sylph-like weight by faithful use of the product.

sandra (who once was a sylph-like 11 stone)

Happy New Year to you & Vanessa & wishing you many more great songs


02 Jan 12 - 09:14 PM (#3283788)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: GUEST,pattyClink

Well, a big Bronx cheer to the nitpickers. I was delighted to get to hear such a beautiful song straight from the heart. Charming and anything but cloying. Thank you GP!


02 Jan 12 - 09:23 PM (#3283791)
Subject: RE: G Papavgeris: 'When She Is Smiling'
From: GUEST,999

George, you write from the heart and it's really good.

Bruce