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08 Jul 17 - 09:03 PM (#3865163) Subject: Thoughts? From: GUEST,Ferrari Just published my first sit down recording of a song I wrote, please let me know what you think! Cheers :) The Ballad of Old Bone and The Barmaid |
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08 Jul 17 - 10:09 PM (#3865168) Subject: RE: Thoughts? - Ballad of Old Bone and The Barmaid From: Joe Offer Hi, Matthew - It doesn't really follow the traditional style that is my preference, so I don't know how valid my opinion can be. It's certainly an interesting effort, and I liked the back-and-forth between the singing and the harmonica. The story told by the song didn't totally catch my interest, but it's a good start. -Joe- BALLAD OF OLD BONE AND THE BARMAID (Matthew Ferrari) Guitar, Vocals and Harmonica by Mathew Ferrari The sun is setting, I'm not regretting The last eight hours I worked and now I'm betting That tonight will be a night to remember Was it in January or December? We went to a bar that my work was near It was tiny, I thought I had nothing to fear Well, overall I guess I was right It was the barmaid that got into a fight A woman blew in with the cold A bony thing she was so young but so old She entered screaming with booze on her breath Her clothes were ragged and her hair was quite the mess Barmaid was kind she wanted to help Old Bone But was reluctant when Old Bone cried "Give me a phone" Barmaid reached to her purse yearning to return To the two strapping lads with money to burn Phone call went bad, Bone got sour Wasn't even there a quarter of an hour An old man shook his head after paying his debts All of this on a quiet street in the west Old Bone screamed and began to rattle We had no idea she was preparing for battle She charged at Barmaid grunting like a boar Old Bone and the Barmaid rolled on to the floor To sum it up, to say it all I watched a tiny barroom brawl I haven't seen Old Bone again yet In that tiny bar on a quiet street in the west |
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09 Jul 17 - 12:27 PM (#3865269) Subject: RE: Thoughts? - Ballad of Old Bone and The Barmaid From: GUEST,Ferrari How was the recording? Were the vocals too loud? |
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09 Jul 17 - 09:39 PM (#3865343) Subject: RE: Thoughts? - Ballad of Old Bone and The Barmaid From: Joe Offer Hi, Matthew - Musically, I liked the song quite well. The voice and guitar and harmonica were all balanced quite well. I hate recordings where the instruments overpower the voice, and this recording didn't do that. But as I said, the story told by the song did not capture my imagination, and that's a problem. I watched a few other videos you did. The guitar work was good, but I couldn't understand the vocals at all. Maybe it would be a good idea to take a few lessons from a voice instructor. I did that, and I found it helped my singing a lot. -Joe- |
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10 Jul 17 - 02:05 PM (#3865464) Subject: RE: Thoughts? - Ballad of Old Bone and The Barmaid From: GUEST,Ferrari Thank you, Joe, I really appreciate the feedback. :) I have some work to do. Cheers! Ferrari |