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Song Challenge! Part 20 |
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Subject: RE: SONG CHALLENGE! Part 20 From: KT Date: 18 Apr 00 - 01:59 AM Hi, Aine. Yes I could put it on an audio tape, but it'll have to wait. I've just returned from a recent festival and I'm now suffering from a bad case of overdidititis. My voice has taken temporary leave ( as did the sense to stop jamming and get some rest) Oh well. It was worth it!! |
Subject: RE: SONG CHALLENGE! Part 20 From: Amergin Date: 22 Apr 00 - 03:36 PM Kelida, the Highwayman is one of the best poems ever written. You did great justice to it. I love your piece. Here's my song (the feeble attempt it is): The Woods I Loved So Well (Tune: Town I Loved So Well)
In my memory I will always see
In the early morn with a sound so forlorn
There was music there in the wooded air
When I came back, how my eyes went black
Now the birds are gone, but I still sing on Amergin
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Subject: RE: SONG CHALLENGE! Part 20 From: Áine Date: 22 Apr 00 - 06:48 PM Dear Amergin, A very appropriate and lovely entry for this Challenge! and well timed for Earth Day, too. Your song has been posted on the SONG CHALLENGE! WINNERS PAGE as a Winner of the Golden Cow Chip with Harp Ribbon. Well done! -- Áine |
Subject: RE: SONG CHALLENGE! Part 20 From: Jack the Sailor Date: 27 Aug 01 - 01:33 PM I turned the topic on to one of the saddest things in today's society. I hope I've made a point. "The woods would be silent indeed if only the best birds sang". Only the best
My little bird is lying
If you could only hear her song
My little girl is starving
Has to be so skinny
If you could only hear her song
Make her wear some make up
Put her through the grinder
If you could only hear her song
One winner will win
Beauty show drama
If you could only see the lie |
Subject: RE: SONG CHALLENGE! Part 20 From: MMario Date: 27 Aug 01 - 02:16 PM you made your point well enough that I had to take a break halfway through reading it. |
Subject: RE: SONG CHALLENGE! Part 20 From: Jack the Sailor Date: 27 Aug 01 - 03:45 PM I turned the topic on to one of the saddest things in today's society. I hope I've made a point. On reading I had some more ideas. Here is a rewrite. "The woods would be silent indeed if only the best birds sang". Only the best (second version) My little bird is lying Lying in her nest My little bird is dying Trying to be the best My little bird is Humming As she plays the game Work hard on becoming A truly famous name Why won't my little bird sing Really, its such a simple thing What pressures and torments do we bring My little girl is starving I worry bout her health When the food is carving she runs off by herself Has to be so skinny She cannot have meat Has to wear that mini So she just will not eat If you could only hear her true song Then you would know that it is so wrong Were creating a world where children don't belong Make her wear some make up To catch Leanne Rhymes Perhaps its time to wake up because she's only nine Put her through the grinder Treat her like some meat Take a key and wind her Prime her for defeat If you could only listen to her heart Then you would know the hardest part Where do you begin, and where do you start One winner will win the rest will all lose How can we begin to choose Beauty show drama Fame and wealth Beckoned Imagine the trauma When they finish a mere second If you could only see the lie Then you would know why young girls die In a sad sad world its a pain to see them cry |
Subject: RE: SONG CHALLENGE! Part 20 From: Jack the Sailor Date: 27 Aug 01 - 04:11 PM I turned the topic on to one of the saddest things in today's society. I hope I've made a point. On reading I ahd some more ideas. Here is a rewrite with line breaks. "The woods would be silent indeed if only the best birds sang". Only the best
My little bird is lying
My little bird is Humming
Why won't my little bird sing?
My little girl is starving
Has to be so skinny
If you could only hear her true song
Make her wear some make up
Put her through the grinder
If you could only listen to her heart
One winner will win
Beauty show drama
If you could only see the lie |
Subject: RE: SONG CHALLENGE! Part 20 From: Aidan Crossey Date: 29 Aug 01 - 09:35 AM A Challenge! that finds me replying in serious vein! Áine, you've found my Achilles heel. (Well - Achill heel actually as this song is based - loosely - on a real-life experience as a callow youth in that part of the world.) It's to the tune "The Dawning Of The Day" as used for Raglan Road.
When first her eyes flashed fire at mine |
Subject: RE: SONG CHALLENGE! Part 20 From: GUEST,KT Date: 29 Aug 01 - 10:42 AM derrymacash, that is beautiful!!!! Especially, "And you shall shine and you shall sing And I shall teach the song." Exquisite!
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Subject: RE: SONG CHALLENGE! Part 20 From: Jack the Sailor Date: 29 Aug 01 - 02:27 PM Nice one! you've captured some of the feeling of raglan road, but made it your own. "As she walked across the bay" It's a nice picture, a little sureal, what is the thought behind the line Derry? |
Subject: RE: SONG CHALLENGE! Part 20 From: Aidan Crossey Date: 30 Aug 01 - 03:41 AM KT and Jack ... thanks for the kind words. Jack ... the word "bay" is commonly used in my neck of the woods to refer not only to the body of water but its shore, hence the line refers to the lady in question walking across the sand (and the preceding line is about the waves washing away the resulting footprints). I never thought that it could be construed otherwise ... goes to show! |
Subject: RE: SONG CHALLENGE! Part 20 From: MMario Date: 30 Aug 01 - 08:37 AM ssilly me - I thought you were implying that she walked on water! |
Subject: RE: SONG CHALLENGE! Part 20 From: Aidan Crossey Date: 30 Aug 01 - 08:42 AM MMario ... I implied a degree of worship ... but not that much! |
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