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Let's write a song together!

Jim Lad 19 Feb 07 - 11:04 PM
Georgiansilver 20 Feb 07 - 02:43 AM
Alec 20 Feb 07 - 02:56 AM
Georgiansilver 20 Feb 07 - 03:07 AM
the fence 20 Feb 07 - 03:21 AM
Jean(eanjay) 20 Feb 07 - 04:38 AM
the one 20 Feb 07 - 04:45 AM
growler 20 Feb 07 - 07:01 AM
Jim Lad 20 Feb 07 - 07:09 AM
The Villan 20 Feb 07 - 07:32 AM
Jim Lad 20 Feb 07 - 07:36 AM
Scrump 20 Feb 07 - 07:40 AM
The Villan 20 Feb 07 - 07:43 AM
Alec 20 Feb 07 - 07:44 AM
The Villan 20 Feb 07 - 07:46 AM
Scrump 20 Feb 07 - 08:05 AM
the fence 20 Feb 07 - 09:12 AM
Ross 20 Feb 07 - 09:14 AM
Scrump 20 Feb 07 - 09:18 AM
David C. Carter 20 Feb 07 - 09:37 AM
Georgiansilver 20 Feb 07 - 12:34 PM
The Villan 20 Feb 07 - 12:48 PM
Jim Lad 20 Feb 07 - 12:59 PM
The Villan 20 Feb 07 - 01:00 PM
Jim Lad 20 Feb 07 - 01:02 PM
Georgiansilver 20 Feb 07 - 04:05 PM
Songster Bob 20 Feb 07 - 04:52 PM
fat B****rd 21 Feb 07 - 03:53 AM
Ross 21 Feb 07 - 04:34 AM
GUEST 21 Feb 07 - 05:04 AM
Georgiansilver 21 Feb 07 - 05:06 AM
Scrump 21 Feb 07 - 05:10 AM
old salty 21 Feb 07 - 05:18 AM
LukeKellylives (Chris) 21 Feb 07 - 03:58 PM
LukeKellylives (Chris) 21 Feb 07 - 03:59 PM
Jim Lad 21 Feb 07 - 05:33 PM
Jim Lad 21 Feb 07 - 05:40 PM
skipy 21 Feb 07 - 05:53 PM
Jim Lad 21 Feb 07 - 05:56 PM
GUEST 21 Feb 07 - 05:58 PM
Dave Wynn 21 Feb 07 - 05:59 PM
Jim Lad 21 Feb 07 - 06:03 PM
The Villan 21 Feb 07 - 06:06 PM
LukeKellylives (Chris) 21 Feb 07 - 06:08 PM
Jim Lad 21 Feb 07 - 06:15 PM
The Villan 21 Feb 07 - 06:16 PM
Jeri 21 Feb 07 - 06:28 PM
Georgiansilver 21 Feb 07 - 06:46 PM
Jim Lad 21 Feb 07 - 06:48 PM
LukeKellylives (Chris) 21 Feb 07 - 06:51 PM
Jim Lad 21 Feb 07 - 06:51 PM
LukeKellylives (Chris) 21 Feb 07 - 06:52 PM
Jim Lad 21 Feb 07 - 06:52 PM
Jim Lad 21 Feb 07 - 06:54 PM
LukeKellylives (Chris) 21 Feb 07 - 06:54 PM
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Jim Lad 21 Feb 07 - 07:01 PM
Dave Wynn 21 Feb 07 - 07:02 PM
Jim Lad 21 Feb 07 - 07:17 PM
Dave Wynn 21 Feb 07 - 07:21 PM
Jim Lad 21 Feb 07 - 07:23 PM
ClaireBear 21 Feb 07 - 07:37 PM
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Subject: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 19 Feb 07 - 11:04 PM

Let's write a song together, about the loss of a loved one from Cancer
The tune:... You choose.
Two lines apiece until four verses are completed.
No more than two lines per verse by any individual. (so no "Guest")
A complete work over by all when we're done (With a vote on the final version)
And finally; we each create a chorus (if needed) with a vote on that also.
No royalties attached or donate it to the cause.
Who's game?
First two lines.... (mind the meter)

It barely seems like yesterday,
You held me in your arms.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Georgiansilver
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 02:43 AM

A Mothers love for her only son,
Amongst the Devonshire farms.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Alec
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 02:56 AM

It only seems like yesterday,
But twenty years,since then have past


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Georgiansilver
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 03:07 AM

Lung cancer took you from us,
A year ago you breathed your last.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: the fence
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 03:21 AM

But in my memories you remain
A light forever more


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jean(eanjay)
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 04:38 AM

Memories stay with us
So I'll always feel you near


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: the one
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 04:45 AM

sun is now setting, your out of harm


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: growler
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 07:01 AM

But I remember when you were young
Your future like the sun


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 07:09 AM

All very good for a four-line-song. I was aiming for four verses. Let's try and keep this soul alive for at least the first one. Mind your head on the meter!

Start again?
First two lines... By alec Whose next?

It only seems like yesterday,
But twenty years,since then have past


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: The Villan
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 07:32 AM

I have this massive growth on my nose
Will they save me - no one knows


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 07:36 AM

Ok! Let it die.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Scrump
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 07:40 AM

They buried you in the churchyard
And with you lies my heart


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: The Villan
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 07:43 AM

Jim Lad my two lines are true. I can send you a photo if you could stomach it.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Alec
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 07:44 AM

And that ought to have been "Passed".


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: The Villan
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 07:46 AM

LOL


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Scrump
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 08:05 AM

Skipping the bits that don't seem like lines of the song, we have this so far:

It barely seems like yesterday,
You held me in your arms.
A Mothers love for her only son,
Amongst the Devonshire farms.

It only seems like yesterday,
But twenty years,since then have past
Lung cancer took you from us,
A year ago you breathed your last.

But in my memories you remain
A light forever more
Memories stay with us
So I'll always feel you near

sun is now setting, your out of harm

But I remember when you were young
Your future like the sun
I have this massive growth on my nose
Will they save me - no one knows

Ok! Let it die.

They buried you in the churchyard
And with you lies my heart

(we need 2 more lines to rhyme with those - anyone?)


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: the fence
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 09:12 AM

As long as I have these memories
We will never be apart


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Ross
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 09:14 AM

And on the wind, I hear you sing
As I ride me horse and cart


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Scrump
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 09:18 AM

Was that a crow I heard just then
Or did the horse just fart?

... I'll get me coat.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: David C. Carter
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 09:37 AM

This is only a wild guess,but I think this song just went tits up!


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Georgiansilver
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 12:34 PM

Tits up can be a pleasant thing,
Tits down too has a special ring.
Tits anywhere or so to speak,
Now let's hear from Liz the Squeak.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: The Villan
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 12:48 PM

LOL you get worse GS

Tits in the belfry
Tits on your nuts
Tits in the apple tree
Tits on the grass
Where else could your tits go
Why up the kyber pass


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 12:59 PM

Alright! Now I feel really stupid. I'm outa here!


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: The Villan
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 01:00 PM

Don't go Jim Lad


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 01:02 PM

Ah. Ah. Ah... Cheerio!


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Georgiansilver
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 04:05 PM

Can we please have another go and be a little sensitive to what this thread is really all about.

It barely seems like yesterday,
You held me in your arms.
A mothers love for her only son,
Amongst the Devonshire farms.

Next verse please.....


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Songster Bob
Date: 20 Feb 07 - 04:52 PM

Why cannot anyone stick to the meter, much less the sentiment?

And, by the bye, you're not writing a song, you know -- just a lyric.

Other'n that, Mrs. Lincoln, how was the play?

Bob


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: fat B****rd
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 03:53 AM

Now as I await my captain's call
To run through a foriegn land
I remember your gentle face
As I write with trembling hand


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Ross
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 04:34 AM

Well done Jim Lad - nice thread - sorry about the horse & cart

A bit better than the general up your arse threads, what's the point of being a folkie bollocks/lets have a moan

Scrumps original appraisal of the lines collected was quite nice

Anyone got a cracking tasteful last two lines?


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: GUEST
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 05:04 AM

And if i should sing the song we wrote,
      It will pierce love,like a dart.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Georgiansilver
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 05:06 AM

So its sentiment will travel far,
And maybe touch YOUR heart.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Scrump
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 05:10 AM

Bah! I posted in this thread earlier, and my posting seems to have gone AWOL.

Anyway - apologies to Jim Lad for my last contribution yesterday, which was intended as a bit of fun. Jim Lad, don't give up, it's a grand idea. Here are the words so far (below). Jim Lad, as starter of this idea, please edit it to remove any words that don't seem correct, etc., and let's see the result so far.

It barely seems like yesterday,
You held me in your arms.
A Mothers love for her only son,
Amongst the Devonshire farms.

Now as I await my captain's call
To run through a foriegn land
I remember your gentle face
As I write with trembling hand [added by fB]

It only seems like yesterday,
But twenty years,since then have past
Lung cancer took you from us,
A year ago you breathed your last.

But in my memories you remain
A light forever more
Memories stay with us
So I'll always feel you near

sun is now setting, your out of harm

But I remember when you were young
Your future like the sun
I have this massive growth on my nose
Will they save me - no one knows

Ok! Let it die.

They buried you in the churchyard
And with you lies my heart
And if i should sing the song we wrote,
      It will pierce love,like a dart.
So its sentiment will travel far,
And maybe touch YOUR heart.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: old salty
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 05:18 AM

sorry i was a guest on my bit.
                                       
       And if i should sing,the song we wrote
       It will pierce love,like a dart.

    All better now, reset me cookies!


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: LukeKellylives (Chris)
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 03:58 PM

So I sing my song now, loudly so you can hear it.
For if I sing loud enough, I believe, I may reach your spirit.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: LukeKellylives (Chris)
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 03:59 PM

Forgot to mention, the way this song is going so far, and with the style of it, I think Sam Hall would be a fitting tune for it. Anyone else?


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 05:33 PM

Look what they done to my song, Ma.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 05:40 PM

It barely seems like yesterday
You held me by the hand
We walked along the seashore
kicked our shoes off in the sand
Then up along the riverbank
and to the shady glen
I'd part with all I own
Just to have yesterday again.


Something like that....


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: skipy
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 05:53 PM

Maybe, just maybe, this may be important to someone, maybe to help someone reconcile a recent or even long past event, perhaps we should be gentle here & try to write something worth singing.
Or pehaps I may be wrong, as I am often and able to admit it!
Skipy


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 05:56 PM

Maybe!


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: GUEST
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 05:58 PM

CANCER SUX


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Dave Wynn
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 05:59 PM

"The dog rose curled around your grave"
"the blossom white and orange"......oh bugger


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 06:03 PM

It barely seems like yesterday
You held me by the hand
We walked along the seashore
kicked our shoes off in the sand
Then up along the riverbank
and to the shady glen
I'd part with all I own
Just to have yesterday again.

Ah but that was in the springtime
When the air was fresh and clear
We never had a worry
Never shed a single tear
But now my heart grows heavy
As I ponder back to then
Won't somebody please show me
The way to yesterday again



Okay! I'm into it now....


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: The Villan
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 06:06 PM

Good LOL


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: LukeKellylives (Chris)
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 06:08 PM

Yeah, scratch my line. It's too long. I'm really thinkin' it should be sung like Sam Hall, still, but it's your song. *shrug*


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 06:15 PM

It barely seems like yesterday
You held me by the hand
We walked along the seashore
kicked our shoes off in the sand
Then up along the riverbank
and to the shady glen
I'd part with all I own
Just to have yesterday again.

Ah but that was in the springtime
When the air was fresh and clear
We never had a worry
Never shed a single tear
But now my heart grows heavy
As I ponder back to then
Won't somebody please show me
The way to yesterday again

Well the summers nearly over
And the nights are closing in
The sparrow long since left her nest
The geese are on the wing
And all the joys we ever had
We'll never share again
But please God above can I
Just have one yesterday again


needs work...


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: The Villan
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 06:16 PM

Your Song as by Elton John :-)

Keep it going Jim Lad


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jeri
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 06:28 PM

Jim it's hard to write anything serious as a group because everyone wants to contribute, even if they don't have anything to contribute but throwaway garbage they don't have to put any thought into. At least it's helpful that they self-identify.

Now there are photographs
And a memory, as I turn the page
You're beautiful and perfect
For never will you age
And these thoughts light my heart
Like the stars the heavens above
Everything in this world dies
Everything, but love


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Georgiansilver
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 06:46 PM

And when I think of you my love,
My heart leaps in my breast.
My memory of your beauty, of
the one I loved the best.
And when the Winter comes once more,
And I sit by our log fire,
I'll think of you with a passion,
You are still my hearts desire.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 06:48 PM

It barely seems like yesterday
You held me by the hand
We walked along the seashore
kicked our shoes off in the sand
Then up along the riverbank
and to the shady glen
I'd part with all I own
Just to have yesterday again.

Ah but that was in the springtime
When the air was fresh and clear
We never had a worry
Never shed a single tear
But now my heart grows heavy
As I ponder back to then
Won't somebody please show me
The way to yesterday again

Well the summers nearly over
And the nights are closing in
The sparrow long since left her nest
The geese are on the wing
And all the joys we ever had
We'll never share again
But please God above can I
Just have one yesterday again

So now my love, I'll say Goodbye
As you go on your way
And know my heart is aching
Just to make it through the day
And though we may be parted
Darling in my heart I pray
That someday we'll be together,
Love, just like .....


jeeze, I can't think of the last word. Let me see. Rhymes with "Heart I pray" .... any takers?
And all done before the wee one wakes up from her nap!


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: LukeKellylives (Chris)
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 06:51 PM

We could do the ultimate cliche and finish it with "Love, just like a morning in May."


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 06:51 PM

Hey! Sorry I was right into it there so I didn't see the other posts. There's some good stuff up there. Why not do a verse each and fiddle around with them In the meantime... Who can put my attempt to music?


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: LukeKellylives (Chris)
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 06:52 PM

*raises hand jumps and down wildly*

Sam Hall! :D

>.>


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 06:52 PM

"Yesterday" Chris, "Yesterday".


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 06:54 PM

Oh Chris t(the "T"s missing from the end of your name!)


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: LukeKellylives (Chris)
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 06:54 PM

Aww...

Oh, well.

Eh. I need to find a poem to put to that...


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: LukeKellylives (Chris)
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 06:57 PM

Ha. Aye, Jim.

That's how I got the nickname "Holy Man" at school. XD

By the way, this song wasn't written for any particular reason, was it? Hate to have someone you know get cancer!


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 07:01 PM

Stated the reason at the start. Anyone wants to put it to music... Give a donation to cancer and give "Mudcat" the credit if they record it.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Dave Wynn
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 07:02 PM

But Jim Lad what does it say (I mean that sans crique). Why not story board a theme in some detail then ask for suggestions on metre, pace and lyrics.

I don't write as a general rule so it's all a bit foggy to me but how about :
A Style e.g. Trad, Modern, timeless
A basic theme e.g. a human state or emotion,love, cowardice, fear, hope, desire, hate, compassion.
A location e.g home, away, lost, the sea, a city, a river, a mountain
A start Scene setting, character(s)
A finish e.g. unrequieted, indeterminate, happy, complete, failure, death.

If I may continue take Little Pot Stove (Harry Robertson) he starts the song with
"Where the winter blizzards blow and the whaling fleet's at rest
Tacked in Leith harbour's sheltered bay safely anchored ten abreast"

This sets the style, the location and a situation of temporary safely in just two lines. The next two lines brings some characters and explains what they are doing there.

Writing by committee is uncommon but t'committee need to to know the basics like start, general content, way to go and end.

Give us a storyboard and see if it works.

Dave Wynn (A.K.A Spot the Dog)


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 07:17 PM

Spot the Dog: You're using the wrong side of the brain. You have to switch over now. The kid woke up so I'll take a look tonight. If it needs a chorus to tie it up, I'll slip one in.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Dave Wynn
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 07:21 PM

OK My Fault.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 07:23 PM

Not at all. You're probably right but you're using intelligence. Wrong stuff!


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: ClaireBear
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 07:37 PM

Jimlad, stick with your "yesterday" theme and you'll have a better ending. Here's a possibility

So now my love, I'll say Goodbye
As you go on your way
And know my heart is aching
Just to make it through the day
And though now we may be parted
Still I pray that in the end
When I've reached my last tomorrow
We'll share yesterday again


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 08:13 PM

It barely seems like yesterday
You held me by the hand
We walked along the seashore
kicked our shoes off in the sand
Then up along the riverbank
and to the shady glen
I'd part with all I own
Just to have yesterday again.

Ah but that was in the springtime
When the air was fresh and clear
We never had a worry
Never shed a single tear
But now my heart grows heavy
As I ponder back to then
Won't somebody please show me
The way to yesterday again

Well the summers nearly over
And the nights are closing in
The sparrow long since left her nest
The geese are on the wing
And all the joys we ever had
We'll never share again
But please God above can I
Just have one yesterday again


So now my love, I'll say Goodbye
As you go on your way
And know my heart is aching
Just to make it through the day
And though now we may be parted
Still I pray that in the end
When I've reached my last tomorrow
We'll share yesterday again

Perfect!
Anyone else?


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 08:51 PM

Spotted Dog: Sorry, I was in a rush. You said... Writing by committee is uncommon but t'committee need to to know the basics like start, general content, way to go and end. .. good idea.

Someone want to start one off? If not, I'll try later. It'll be a new song & theme.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 21 Feb 07 - 11:14 PM

Spot The Dog: There's a stretch of highway, (a few hundred miles of it) Highway 16 West which runs west of Prince George, BC out to Terrace and then on to Prince Rupert. The route has been named "The Highway of Tears" in recent years due to the mysterious disappearance of many young women, most of them Aboriginals.
I would be very interested in seeing how some of us would handle this particular topic. From the families' points of view or the girl herself. Alone in the wilderness. Her fate unknown. Wouldn't really touch on what's probably happened to her. The fact that they're Aboriginals is thought by many to be the main reason that these losses could go on for so long, without any kind of intervention by the R.C.M.P.
Now, I know this road very well and would be inclined to stay out of the actual writing but could certainly help out with the geography. (although it probably wouldn't be necessary)
Would that be something we could get our teeth into?
Search.... "Highway of Tears, Highway 16, BC, Canada" and I have no doubt that you'll find something.
When one of you is ready, start a new thread "Highway of Tears" and go about building the song in whichever way you choose. (two lines at a time didn't work)


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Scrump
Date: 22 Feb 07 - 07:51 AM

Jim it's hard to write anything serious as a group because everyone wants to contribute, even if they don't have anything to contribute but throwaway garbage they don't have to put any thought into. At least it's helpful that they self-identify.

Well thanks for that. How do you know I didn't put any thought into my contribution? Evidently it was 'throwaway garbage' because it was thrown away, but that doesn't mean I didn't think about it. It might just mean I'm not able to write stuff as well as you.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Georgiansilver
Date: 22 Feb 07 - 09:51 AM

My contributions are apparently throwaway garbage...better re-think my strategies!


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 22 Feb 07 - 10:54 AM

The process was flawed from the start. My fault entirely. If you folks can come up with a formula that might work, I'd be very interested in it.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Dave Wynn
Date: 22 Feb 07 - 12:38 PM

I wouldn't say flawed Jim Lad, in three days you have a song that just needs a tune and possibly a refrain. At the risk of getting cut up I would suggest that Swallow is substituted for Sparrow and walking on broken glass I would re-arrange the first line of the last verse to read "So now I'll say goodbye ,my love" (dunno why)

I like the idea of Highway of Tears, I will look on the net as you recommend.

Dave Wynn


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 22 Feb 07 - 12:49 PM

Thanks Dave: Cut & Paste, try it out. Sounds good though. Check with Claire Bear before you change the last verse. Taking the wean out to music class now. I'll check in later.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Dave Wynn
Date: 22 Feb 07 - 12:57 PM

Jim lad,

There is already a CD out with two songs on it performed by Ray Bessette and co-authored by Ray and Brent Brekkaas. One song called "Please Come Home" and the other the title "Highway of Tears". Ray provided all the recording and distribution costs with proceeds going to signage along the highway
It's a heartbreaking story and beyond my comprehension to even know where to start.

Dave Wynn


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Dave Wynn
Date: 22 Feb 07 - 01:01 PM

Clair Bear wrote it and I sure as shootin' aint going to edit it. I value my life :-)

Dave W


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: ClaireBear
Date: 22 Feb 07 - 01:27 PM

I like Spot the Dog's line better -- and anyway I didn't write the former line; I found it in a prior JimLad post.

But it's nice of you to defer to me. I have a suggestion for the following few words, come to think of it:

So now I'll say goodbye my love
But as you slip away
Please know my heart is aching
Just to make it through the day
And though now we may be parted
Still I pray that in the end
When I've reached my last tomorrow
We'll share yesterday again


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 22 Feb 07 - 02:10 PM

Ouch! In my mind the bugger was already gone but that works too!

Spot the dog: Re "Highway of Tears" Whatever you do, don't look at the other songs. (there's probably a bunch of them by now)


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 22 Feb 07 - 02:19 PM

The big flaw that I see is that many contributions are being ignored and I'm the biggest culprit. There has to be a way around this. Perhaps one of you comes up with a piece of work and mails it to other individuals. We post it now and then for more input. Something like that. Georgian Silver, Scrump, Chris or one of the others could co-ordinate it. My mother says I don't work well with others.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 23 Feb 07 - 02:38 AM

It barely seems like yesterday
You held me by the hand
We walked along the seashore
kicked our shoes off in the sand
Then up along the riverbank
and to the shady glen
I'd part with all I own
Just to have yesterday again.

Ah but that was in the springtime
When the air was fresh and clear
We never had a worry
Never shed a single tear
But now my heart grows heavy
As I ponder back to then
Won't somebody please show me
The way to yesterday again

Well the summers nearly over
And the nights are closing in
The sparrow long since left her nest
The geese are on the wing
And all the joys we ever had
We'll never share again
But please God above can I
Just have one yesterday again


So now I'll say goodbye my love
But as you slip away
Please know my heart is aching
Just to make it through the day
And though now we may be parted
Still I pray that in the end
When I've reached my last tomorrow
We'll share yesterday again

I suggest now that the lyrics are done and all we need is a real musician to turn it into a song.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Georgiansilver
Date: 23 Feb 07 - 03:29 AM

To the tune of 'The Sally Gardens'


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Georgiansilver
Date: 23 Feb 07 - 03:33 AM

5th line...last verse...remove the 'And'


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 23 Feb 07 - 03:36 AM

I'm not here! Yous do it.


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 20 Mar 07 - 04:05 PM

It barely seems like yesterday
You held me by the hand
We walked along the seashore
kicked our shoes off in the sand
Then up along the riverbank
and to the shady glen
I'd part with all I own
Just to have yesterday again.

Ah but that was in the springtime
When the air was fresh and clear
We never had a worry
Never shed a single tear
But now my heart grows heavy
As I ponder back to then
Won't somebody please show me
The way to yesterday again

Well the summers nearly over
And the nights are closing in
The sparrow long since left her nest
The geese are on the wing
And all the joys we ever had
We'll never share again
But please God above can I
Just have one yesterday again


So now I'll say goodbye my love
But as you slip away
Please know my heart is aching
Just to make it through the day
Though now we may be parted
Still I pray that in the end
When I've reached my last tomorrow
We'll share yesterday again


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Subject: RE: Let's write a song together!
From: Jim Lad
Date: 20 Mar 07 - 04:07 PM

From: Georgiansilver: "To the tune of 'The Sally Gardens'" .....
Something like that


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